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Andrew


Author: giver_of_death
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I love him ^_^


Andrew



Tears sting as they run down my face
I’ll hide myself in disgrace
I can’t look at you without crying
This hurts so bad I feel like I’m dieing
I can’t even begin to explain
How this is causing so much pain
I never felt like this about anyone else
And I wish someone could offer me help
No one will get my feelings for you
But no longer will I deny the truth
I love you and I can’t believe
How many tears I’ve wiped on my sleeve
Thinking of you makes me smile
And you make me feel that life is worthwhile
So much about me no one else knows
I just have to let my feelings expose
I can’t keep this inside for any longer
You’re presence makes me that much stronger
When I see your face I can’t help but melt
This confused I’ve never felt
Me telling you this doesn’t mean anything
But you have to know how much it stings
Never have I faced something this hard
Pain, tears, I’m forever scared
This is that hardest thing I’ve dealt with
And I’m sorry, but I had to admit
That you haven’t been out of my head
The future is something I dread
Because I love loving you, weird it may seem
But I’ve never felt love so extreme
Nor have I cried ever this much
What would I give for that one touch?
So Andrew I couldn’t explain it another way
And I couldn’t wait for another passing day
I love you, take it or leave it
Because you’re my drug and I’m trying to quit
So I’ll sit her still and wipe away my tears
And think of how you conquer my fears
Well, that how I feel, I’m done
Please oh please, me don’t shun





Submitted on 2006-12-12 16:00:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  W0w i almost forgot that feelings like that exist in the world...keep that feeling forever...dont ever let ureself feel just the opposite of this "love"...and as to ure poem i think it was well put...this was my favotrite part... I can’t look at you without crying
This hurts so bad I feel like I’m dieing
I can’t even begin to explain
How this is causing so much pain
I never felt like this about anyone else ...
Man i remember feeling like this...ahh...ohwell great job...keep it up!!!
~Andie~ xoxo
| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Andie | [ Reply to This ]


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