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    dots Submission Name: You Don't Mean Anythingdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 718
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    dotsYou Don't Mean Anythingdots
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    I opened my eyes this morning,
    Lay listening to the sounds of the day
    Your face was the first thing on my mind
    While I listened to a certain song play.
    The familiar ache started in my chest
    That longing for days gone by
    I pushed the hurt away
    For the first time I did not cry.
    I contemplated the designs on the ceiling
    In this room where you never lay
    And after all this time,
    I think it's safe to say

    You don't mean anything to me
    The love we had is gone
    It's hard to believe I can say this
    After I've loved you for so damn long
    You don't mean anything to me
    My heart is once again my own
    And after so many sleepless nights
    I'm almost glad to be alone.

    I found a picture of you the other day
    And I removed it from the frame
    And I manage to keep my heart from breaking
    When someone says your name
    I gave my body to someone else
    Kept my heart for myself
    When he touches me I feel nothing
    But that's the hand that I was dealt
    It's been forever since I've heard your voice
    Months since I've felt your touch
    And I just can't figure out
    How I can love you so goddamn much

    You don't mean anything to me
    That's what I continue to say
    And I wish that I had done everything
    That I could to make you stay
    You don't mean anything to me
    I'll pretend you were a two-year fling
    You don't mean anything at all
    You mean everything.




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      i dont know how much i really like this. there was just a lot of stuff in it that ive hear before. no offense because im not trying to trash your poem or anything. but im kind of an [censored] commenter (which is why i dont comment alot) and im going to be honest. i like the last lines. i thought that was a good twist. but up until then it was really really redundant and clichéd. the first stanza was decent.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      This a really nice poem. But I am a bit confused in some areas. Such as

    When he touches me I feel nothing
    But that's the hand that I was dealt

    You say you gave your heart to someone else who you don't love. I get that. But i don't get what this means 'But that's the hand that I was dealt' Then it changes back to the guy you love.
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by marray proetus | [ Reply to This ]
      Id like to commend you for being so honest and open in this poem,its really hard to write this way without it sounding over-dramatic or crap,when some people are hurt they just flurry into a hastily written work to get it off their chest,but you've managed to give it a bit of shape and form to to turn it into a really good poem.
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Raivn,
    WOW, I don't think that I have read a piece that so elequently(probably spelled wrong, who knows, not me or it would be spelled right) describes the struggle of a break-up.
    The games that the mind plays with you, the war between the brain telling you to "get over it, it's over" and the heart say "the hell it is"
    This struggle is perfectly conveyed here:

    "You don't mean anything to me
    That's what I continue to say
    And I wish that I had done everything
    That I could to make you stay
    You don't mean anything to me
    I'll pretend you were a two-year fling
    You don't mean anything at all
    You mean everything."

    I really enjoyed this and I look foward to reading more of your work. By the way try wearing his skin for a day.....it helps!!!
    Thanks,
    Will



    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by Twice | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is wonderful
    i loved it. this is kinda what im going through, and i know it makes me feel good when people tell me they relate to it. but my last relationship, i loved him, and i still do..and i dont understand why he broke up with me, but ive come to realize that i need to get over him because theres nothing i can do for him to come back to me.. and i hate that.. it hurts.. but this poem makes me think that i'll get over it in time..
    Makes me realize a lot more about my feelings, thanks for opening that door..

    Kimmy*
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Kimmy | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't completely get this...well actually, maybe I do. I don't know. It's like, this girl thinks she's over this guy, and she does everything to say she is, to try to convince herself of it, but in the end, she lets the truth slip a little, and, i got this from this line

    "I'll pretend you were a two-year fling",

    maybe goes a little nuts. Not like crazy, just stressed and upset.

    But yeah, let me know if I understood this right please?

    Lia
    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      "I found a picture of you the other day
    And I removed it from the frame
    And I manage to keep my heart from breaking
    When someone says your name"

    THis part was my favorite. I think this was progress for you, not only have you written something...it was sincere and you put your heart into it and nothing is better than that. I'm happy that you are starting to regain your own heart. From here on out, judging from me and Joey and the steps all seeming to be the same, you will only feel better about yourself.

    I hope you are happy. Merry Christmas, I think I will be able to actually see Grandma and you guys for Christmas. So that's great. Anyways...I'll see you when I see you and hopefully that is soon.

    Much love
    Good luck and very I am proud of this writing...

    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is beautiful. it opens up a hole in your chest and then pulls at the edges the whole time. i could really the feel the pain and torment and denial she was going through. if this happened to you, i am eternally sorry, because i know exactly how it feels. i liked how you described not being able to love again
    "I gave my body to someone else
    Kept my heart for myself
    When he touches me I feel nothing
    But that's the hand that I was dealt"
    thats exactly how it happens. this was an great read, thanks! im adding it to my favorites.
    peace.
    ~Shadia
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Shadia Dark | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry for the empty comment b4, I accidently clicked on post before I could acutally write anything. Ok, ill first say that I love your poem! Stanza 1 was great because you really capture the emotion and physcial state of being in the scenerio. I understand completely what you are saying! Its scary! At first you were saying how you were over him, and I was going to congratulate you (because that is still a place I am trying to reach) but then I saw more towards the ending that you are trying to convice yourself that he doesn't "...mean anything to me" by repeating that to yourself and in your poem but you then claim at the end that he means everything. That really choked me, probably cuz that really says it all, how you really feel about him. Simply 3 words "you mean everything", ironically like the norm 3 words "i love you". Anyway, good write! i apparently enjoyed it. lol

    -angel-
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry for the empty comment b4, I accidently clicked on post before I could acutally write anything. Ok, ill first say that I love your poem! Stanza 1 was great because you really capture the emotion and physcial state of being in the scenerio. I understand completely what you are saying! Its scary! At first you were saying how you were over him, and I was going to congratulate you (because that is still a place I am trying to reach) but then I saw more towards the ending that you are trying to convice yourself that he doesn't "...mean anything to me" by repeating that to yourself and in your poem but you then claim at the end that he means everything. That really choked me, probably cuz that really says it all, how you really feel about him. Simply 3 words "you mean everything", ironically like the norm 3 words "i love you". Anyway, good write! i apparently enjoyed it. lol

    -angel-
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Ouch. this has some sting to it. It always hurts to let someone go, and sometimes the bitterness helps. But it seems to me that this is one of those, "I can't make myself hate you" pieces. The fourth stanza is really sad. It's like, your body wants something more than your heart does, because your heart still belongs to the other person. I'm sorry that you have to go through this, but perhaps it will make you grow as a person, and a writer.
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by lebeauvide | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great piece.
    I know exactly how you feel.
    My relationship might not have been two years, but he was my first love and he was at that point my everything.
    Luckily because I dated other guys I have found someone even better than him and I really do love him.
    I know...I am 15 what do I know of love....Well knowing love has nothing to do with age.
    I hope that you get over that guy and find someone to love that is worth your time, because the one that really loves you will not break your heart.
    Keep Writing.
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]


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