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My Shoes

Author: darkwiccan14
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Comedy
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lol my shoes!

My Shoes

My shoes,
full of effin glue,

My shoes,
so orange it might just
might make your eyes turn blue.

My shoes,
black as the world that
it might split it in two.

My shoes,
WTF am I talking about my
effin shoes that made us lose?!

My shoes,
the most outragious
thing that hadn't gave the mystery gang a clue.

Submitted on 2006-12-12 21:34:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lol you're very different from anyone I read, and I think that's awesome in itself. As I was looking over your page, I noticed that you post in the comedy genre, and I found that intriguing since nobody really does that here, so it really put a smile on my face to see some happiness and livelihood around here hehe.

Your shoes seemed to have traveled as far as the world can go with how worn it is hehe, so I guess anyone can interpret the look of the shoe as something different.

I really like the conclusion, it's just cute hehe. If those meddling kids couldn't figure it out and than who can other than the one wearing them??! hehe, so great job ;)

| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by darkrose16 | [ Reply to This ]

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