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    dots Submission Name: The Minddots
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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 812
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       shrooms, gonj, booze. It's that simple.


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    dotsThe Minddots
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    They say a mans mind,
    is an awful thing to break.
    Twisting it and turning it,
    till there's no more it can take.
    And once It's finally broke,
    there is no way which to fix it.
    See the mind can only take so much,
    before it turns all twisted.
    But fear you not, dear fair feared soul,
    the mind still ticks away.
    Plotting revenge for shattered pieces,
    its plans thicken every day.
    To rip the heart from the fiend,
    the one who caused it all.
    The mind will be the end of them,
    the mind will make them fall.
    But till that day the mind will wait,
    and steady for the blow.
    For when it strikes the world will shake,
    and every soul will know.




    Submitted on 2006-12-13 03:53:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i don't think you're insane. i think you've captured a mind that has snapped from revenge, not total insanity. but it reminds me of a superhero's course.
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      such a revengeful mind.. your write borders the thin line between sanity and insanity...
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by E. Audine | [ Reply to This ]


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