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    dots Submission Name: Connarddots

    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       to avoid confusion i guess i need to make a clarification...this is about my dad leaving my mom for another woman...not about a boy breaing up with me...

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    "to avoid conversations,
    i hold my wrist.
    to burn my fears,
    i fade into the mist.
    and then i fade away..."

    for the moment,
    i'm out of answers.
    but to be honest,
    i really cannot stand her.

    isn't this exactly where
    you expect me to be?
    lying to myself
    and her,
    i'm sorry but i can't
    carry that burden

    look in the mirror
    i dare you
    tell me what the fuck you see
    i already know
    so don't you try to lie to me

    i tore my heart open
    and let you inside
    before it was gold and shining
    but now i'm just bitter
    and yes it is your fault.

    and now,
    oh aren't you so happy?
    yea i bet you are.
    i'm fine, i'm used
    but atleast i let go
    and fixed myself,
    for the most of it.

    yea i still hurt
    and i'm still very angry
    i can't look into others eyes
    because they're the ones
    YOU let see me cry

    i just hold onto myself,
    and blend into the sky.
    that's what i say to myself...

    atleast now i can think about myself,
    and not deal with you.

    watch me walk away
    do you see? i'm leaving...
    i am so gone

    Submitted on 2006-12-13 19:23:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nah, this is meaningless babble. There is no point releasing this to be criticised when there is no style or strong imagry. This obviously means something to you but poetry must have some form of aesthetic value to the reader other than simple spoilt adolescent rantings about some girl you do'nt like. Next time try write a poem.

    - Sethesin
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]

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