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    dots Submission Name: Romcom nightdots

    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1339
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1137

       I noticed just how much my life resembles the romantic comedy series I've been watching so much of tonight.
    This isn't about me, just the idea of what could be.

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    dotsRomcom nightdots

    Running through a memory
    Upon a sodden bed
    Tears still burn, as I recall
    Our ridicule, our fate
    I loved her while she loved him and Gordon loved us both
    And millions would sit and stare and giggle at the show

    Thoughts, a running commentary
    Parading through soft eyes
    Eclipsed by the familiarity
    Of a thousand goodbyes
    Words were said and laughs were many, pratfalls spilled like wine
    And my girl would bed a thousand guys, but never would be mine

    So sad, those times were plenty
    Though we always, smiled through
    We danced our way, through yesterdays
    And with each step we grew
    We met, we left, we almost died, but in the end returned
    We lived through crashes; forest fires and none of us got burned

    But summing up tonight I see
    The ending of the series
    We all a will go our separate ways
    To reunite at Christmas
    You were my family, sisters, lovers, together ‘til the end
    Or as it seems, ‘til our ratings dropped, I miss you so much, my friends.

    Submitted on 2006-12-13 20:04:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a good write.

    "And my girl would bed a thousand guys,
    but would never be mine"

    I would go- but never would be mine.
    It puts the emphasis on never and flows a lil better.

    Other than that no quams. I liked this peice, your descriptions are very vivacious and really make the reader experience this peice. Cheers.
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]

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