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    dots Submission Name: Denialdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 678
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 966



    Description:
       I think I ujust broke up with the most perfect woman I ever knew.
    WFT is wrong with me?
    well I tried to sleep but wrote this instead, sorry everyone if it's shit.
    I'm confused


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    dotsDenialdots
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    The thought eclipsed me, for a moment of clarity
    It's gone,
    It's gone,
    Must have disappeared so fast, I still can't believe,
    It's gone,
    It's gone,
    The fingers wrapped inside of me, refuse to let go but,
    It's gone,
    Long gone,
    I could never say how it could last, but I was still so sure,
    It's gone,
    So gone,
    That it would be inside of me and you, forever more
    But no,
    It's gone,
    Snuffed without a breeze, beneath a flame that never flickered
    It went,
    And it's gone,
    Closed the door yet bolted, though the chains it left intact,
    But still,
    It's gone,
    Yet still I lie here waiting, for the whisper in my ear,
    'cause I know,
    It can't go,
    Yes I know,
    You won't go,
    You've not gone,
    You've not gone.




    Submitted on 2006-12-13 23:55:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Personal feelings are never crap. I won't consider it poetry but some parts of it are definitively there.

    I really think you don't need a lecture on your piece or either about what love is. You probably know it already. If deep inside of you, your heart says, you've let go the best thing that ever happened to you, then it's only obvious you should get it back before it becomes too late. Forgive everything that happened earlier that caused you to break up and just talk this through.

    Anything is possible.

    Take care....
    Irina
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      CAll her back and hug her!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Quick
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]


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