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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 1193
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       I guess, when it ended between my boyfriend and I, I didn't think it was going to be like this. I don't know why I thought we could immediately be really good friends. We can barely talk on the phone. It's sad that..how it used to be...how we used to be..we might not ever get that back. I don't know how we became what we are right now..but..it makes me sad. I just want my friend back....no more tension...no more resentment....no more bitterness..We were too good together to have it be like This.


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    After all the years, and tears, and miles,
    Oceans and neverending distance,
    After every up and every down,
    The highest of highs and lowest of lows,
    After such a beautiful love, such a deep devotion,
    How did we fall, how did we fail,
    My love, How did we become this?

    This tension, this bitterness,
    Voices of stone, hearts of ice,
    Tired minds, and frustrated souls,
    Seem to be all that remain.
    He had the gentlest of touches,
    Safety in his arms, and a promise in his eyes.
    He'd whisper I love you in my ear,
    As he'd prove that love,
    Over and over again.
    I'd shiver under his touch,
    Submit to every kiss,
    And hang on every word.

    Best friend, lover, boyfriend, Husband,
    After such a beautiful love, such a deep devotion,
    How did we fall, how did we fail,
    My love, How did we become This?





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      I think you capture very well the complexity and the fine line between lovers / friends. This begs the question, can ex lovers remain good friends - in my mind the answer has to be no, as long as either party has feelings for the other.

    Great right Hallie.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      oh oh oh....do i ever know how you feel...my ex and i hadn't spoken in the longest time...and for awhile i wasn't sure if he was alive or dead...it was like he dissapeared...but now everythings good...we talk, we hang out, and we have fun just like we used to...no tension, no anger, no feelings, no nothing...just a friendship...and i think it happened because we both moved on and realized that we still loved eachother...as friends...and were happy for one another...and everything is really good between us now...i hope that this can happen for you...because it is like putting a sword through your soul to lose your best friend...kisses~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]


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