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    dots Submission Name: *First Snowfalldots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1040
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       spur of the moment type thing...comments appreciated..hope you enjoy

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    dots*First Snowfalldots

    a swiss sky
    a downfall of many
    each one differs from the one before
    on the ground
    on the house
    on the cars
    a blanket of white
    everywhere you look

    people inside warming up
    infront of the fire
    drinking hot coco
    snuggling up under a blanket
    watching a movie

    moment by moment
    snowflake by snowflake
    the frostier it gets
    swirling in the wind
    they come down
    covering the earth
    in a silvery white
    a image we will cherish
    in our memories forever

    Submitted on 2006-12-14 16:48:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Snow, a great subject to write about, so many images and so much room for poetic licence. This as usual is well written and well structured. May I congratulate you on another successful write. Fleur x
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]
      Great work.
    This is really good. I love snow, so poety about it is always enjoyable. This is really cool. The only thing I felt strange about was the word "frostier" in the last stanza... I ma not sure why, but for some reason that word feels kind of strange in there. Maybe think of making a slight change there. But if not, it's still very good.

    Keep up the great writing!

    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]
      This is exactly a place I want to be and doing what you described.
    The imagery was great.
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the whole scenery within the imagery but i will never be able to see such a day. hope you will. have a merry christmas
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]

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