*First Snowfall

Author: Caotic_Disaster ASL Info:    16/F/Canada Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447 /349 /148 Words: 86

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*First Snowfall

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a swiss sky a downfall of many each one differs from the one before on the ground on the house on the cars a blanket of white everywhere you look people inside warming up infront of the fire drinking hot coco snuggling up under a blanket watching a movie moment by moment snowflake by snowflake the frostier it gets swirling in the wind they come down covering the earth in a silvery white a image we will cherish in our memories forever

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Snow, a great subject to write about, so many images and so much room for poetic licence. This as usual is well written and well structured. May I congratulate you on another successful write. Fleur x

| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]

Great work. This is really good. I love snow, so poety about it is always enjoyable. This is really cool. The only thing I felt strange about was the word "frostier" in the last stanza... I ma not sure why, but for some reason that word feels kind of strange in there. Maybe think of making a slight change there. But if not, it's still very good. Keep up the great writing! peace. -Kamerin

| Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]

This is exactly a place I want to be and doing what you described. The imagery was great.

| Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]

i like the whole scenery within the imagery but i will never be able to see such a day. hope you will. have a merry christmas

| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]

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