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*First Snowfall

Author: Caotic_Disaster
ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447 /349 /148
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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spur of the moment type thing...comments appreciated..hope you enjoy

*First Snowfall

a swiss sky
a downfall of many
each one differs from the one before
on the ground
on the house
on the cars
a blanket of white
everywhere you look

people inside warming up
infront of the fire
drinking hot coco
snuggling up under a blanket
watching a movie

moment by moment
snowflake by snowflake
the frostier it gets
swirling in the wind
they come down
covering the earth
in a silvery white
a image we will cherish
in our memories forever

Submitted on 2006-12-14 16:48:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Snow, a great subject to write about, so many images and so much room for poetic licence. This as usual is well written and well structured. May I congratulate you on another successful write. Fleur x
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]
  Great work.
This is really good. I love snow, so poety about it is always enjoyable. This is really cool. The only thing I felt strange about was the word "frostier" in the last stanza... I ma not sure why, but for some reason that word feels kind of strange in there. Maybe think of making a slight change there. But if not, it's still very good.

Keep up the great writing!

| Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]
  This is exactly a place I want to be and doing what you described.
The imagery was great.
| Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the whole scenery within the imagery but i will never be able to see such a day. hope you will. have a merry christmas
| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]

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