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    dots Submission Name: 21 and 18, a heartbreak.dots
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    Author: fabulousAMY
    ASL Info:    21/Female/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 159/159/61
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots21 and 18, a heartbreak.dots
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    Don't wait for me, not even for a second.
    The hurt in your thick lashed brown eyes is too much for me to bear,
    I caused it, I made streams flow down your cheeks.
    Then I tried to stop them with my soft lips...
    But my kisses were colder than ice and emptier than the bottle in front of you.
    The scotch flushes your cheeks and makes you warm to touch,
    Your long artist's fingers grope my hands and wrists.
    We sit close on this stiff blue couch, my thighs touching yours.
    I'm looking at the door, awkward, ready to leave you behind in your heartache.
    You mumble something, digging in your jacket pockets for a bag of a substance to make you numb.
    "Oh god. I'm sorry, I need to go," I'm repeating as I pull away from your grip.
    Your gorgeous hands hang loosely and your eyes are dark and pained, heavy with tears.
    The beautiful, lush, black eyelashes flutter as you close your eyes,
    You're pleading with me, promising you'll wait for me, because you know, I'll come back to you.
    I'm beautiful and mildly destructive, I'm sure I'm not coming back to you.
    But I leave you with a kiss that cries of the lips of strangers and you tell me how sweet I taste.




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      this is my favorite write.
    its so compassionate.
    you are such a great writer!
    may i ask what happened between
    you both?

    <3 lelian
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Lelian Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful. I can see you, hurting because you hurt HIM when you didn't mean to, but wanting very badly to let go and just leave the whole awkward situation. It's one of those moments where you want to fix it, but you can't find any words that could possibly measure up to apology or anything like it.

    Great writing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]



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