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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 575
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1214



    Description:
       a movie is not about what it is about
    but about how it is about
    ~Roger Ebert~

    For those who may be curious, the 'story' in question is taken from a gothic western anthology B-movie called "Grim Prairie Tales" starring James Earl Jones.


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    what a cinematic coil
    that twisted wit possessed

    sort of a cool flick?

    oh, yeah, quite the ride

    that babe had a nasty
    set of molars
    lining her vagina
    swallowing men
    like soda swirling
    through a straw

    how charming

    yeah, then she plucked
    the dry husks
    from her cunt
    solemnly awaiting
    the next fool to seduce

    so this is how
    the movie moved you?
    like a sniper perched
    slyly on your shoulder
    enjoying the view?


    I love tiny islands
    of unreality

    someday I may
    share them
    with a worthy foe

    and what about your friend?
    the blonde girl?


    who?

    your date for the evening?

    can't remember if I had one

    I suppose not...
    or someone else had two





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      This brings to mind a mostly unrelated paraphrased quote of Flannery O'Conor, that goes something along the lines of "A lot of people say that you get to escape reality when you write. They're wrong. Writing is about suffocating yourself with reality." Anyways... it goes something like that. The point is, is that while this holds true for books, I don't think it does for movies. And that's not to say that there are some books that are unrealistic, but that they are realisticly unrealistic, while many movies are simply unrealistic. That might not make any sense at all. I hate that movies and television have replaced reading to such a degree... but in our mindless warp speed society, how can something that demands thinking and comprehending and effort possibly compare with the screen, when it's doing everything for us...

    This was a pretty tangent oriented comment.

    I liked the poem.

    justin
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow!!! This gave me bundles of laughter and I found it an exhileration to read!

    The superficial nature of movies and the insatiable appetitie we have to be lost within the unrealities of a world on the big screen, is really wll expressed here.

    It's a great interaction of thought and conversation. A wonderful piece!
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      This does have an enticing rhythm as you question the critic who supposed the movie was worth something. Apparently it's not and it sounds from your description like something very angry applied itself to film as it passed through the digital mindworks.

    Because you use some pretty rank language and it's not that it doesn't fit here, to me it doesn't fit anywhere. Even the image of what you're playing in my imagination isn't pleasant.

    I have to be true to form and tell you I have no desire to see this movie. But that might be exactly your portrayal, what's love got to do to with it? But the c word is really derrogatory in my mind and I don't like it, even if I'm seeing it in a positive context
    which hardly ever seems to occur But I suppose it's that I love women and they are a beautiful blur in my mind.

    I'm not offended, just speaking up for the effective aim of satire.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Not to be repetitive, but I also liked the beat and the conversation weaved in. I did find feel a bit lost for a moment there between "so this is how" and "with a worthy foe." I mean I followed and loved the bit about the islands, I just felt like they weren't completely woven into the rest of the conversation.
    The opening was harsh, but in a good way, and I have to say I liked it overall.

    - T T
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by TT | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not entirely sure what makes this so appealing. It may be the stacatto sort of beat it has, or the way you made a conversation into a poem. Admittedly, somewhat darker stuff tends to appeal to me, and I think this qualifies. I can't think of critique. I like it the way it is.
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Clarkie | [ Reply to This ]


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