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    dots Submission Name: ma chanson de mort, donc m'embrasserdots

    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       not a petty little teenage girl rant, as some people have been saying about my shit lately

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    dotsma chanson de mort, donc m'embrasserdots

    dig a little deeper
    waiting for that one creeper
    and while he comes along
    let him look into the mirror

    knock knock on the door
    guess who's there,
    maybe a whore

    shriveled and discarded
    but her toes freshly painted
    the smell still new to the air
    fighting to blend in

    i'd love to be acquainted
    with a girl who could not stand
    here she now lies
    as time will now pass

    no longer a dreaded shadow to him
    more of a shameful,
    yet forgotten memory

    Submitted on 2006-12-14 20:56:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I get the sense that there's much that you want to say but somehow can't find a way to express it. You're struggling here to find your poetic voice (it's always a struggle). Keep going. I sense with this that you are THIS close to breaking through...
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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