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    dots Submission Name: Reminiscedots

    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 921
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       This will most likely sound like a random rant but it has a hidden meaning, mostly on a mistake I made involving a friendship/relationship. It helped me make a decision.... the right decision.
    Friendship beats all.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    The past is retold
    Your bliss unfolds
    With memories
    And pleasant dreams

    Time to remember
    You must surrender
    What to decide
    What to let slide

    Good times recalled
    Joy reinstalled
    But laughter's forgotten
    And sorrow brought in

    When time returns
    The hurt still burns
    All comes to an end
    No more pretend

    Choice were made
    Prices soon paid
    Paths are crossed
    innocence now lost

    Submitted on 2006-12-14 22:58:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece and I think the simple format is fine if that is your style. But this piece left me wondering what the event was that made these feelings so strong. You speak of innocence being lost but why? This is a good start but you might want to add more to it. It is just very general. But all in all a good start. Have a good night. -Hill
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey... what are we talking about here?
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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