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So.... cold


Author: Black-Death
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So.... cold



im so cold.... so.. cold... i can feel my heart freazing.. i can feel theas tears freasing to my face... im so cold... hevan cant even hear my screams.... so cold... i reach into my pocket... look at that photograph... i look... into the eyes that warmed me... and now leave me here cold...




Submitted on 2006-12-15 00:13:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  mmmm it's wonderful. short and dark, and pained i like it
| Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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