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    dots Submission Name: For When The Earth And Sun Collidedots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       this began as almost a reminder list...


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    dotsFor When The Earth And Sun Collidedots
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    This is a letter written to yourself;
    Reminding you that your beautiful
    just in case there is no one else.

    Spend less time dwelling,
    on past events gone wrong.
    Instead develop a new passion.
    To live your life strong.

    Work on your anger,
    though we all get mad.
    Know that it's alright to sleep alone,
    and that really it's not that bad.

    Don't ignore your new bitterness,
    and how you've enabled it to grow.
    Confront your frustrations and feelings,
    even the ones you have never let known.

    Next handle your issues.
    Learn not every man will just use you.
    Respect every aspect of yourself.
    Or else no one else will.

    Think about everything...
    "Why is this such a big deal?"

    Break down your blackened boundries.
    Slam through your inner restrictions.
    Stop to re-navigate your previous positions.
    Count on no one to be by your side,
    but, most importantly, be aware when someone is.
    Learn just how far you have fallen,
    and then figure out why you did.

    Remember that the pain always subsides.
    Making your exsistense a lot easier,
    when the earth and sun collide.
    You can make it.

    This is a letter from yourself...
    With love.




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      This write I really really like
    Not only are you helping yourself but you are helping every single person who reads this
    I too write with positive nessages as I can feel negativity and stay as far away from it as I can
    Again Thank You for sharing this very important right
    I know as a fact this will help a lot of people who need some help on this site
    Looking forward to reading more from you in the future
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
       This was a good poem with a good message, but I feel as the first four or so stanzas rhymed in the exact same way, it made it feel a bit too repetative, or simular, where as the later ones were all unique. Just a pet peeve I have.
    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow, I really like this work. Very encouraging. Something people should think day by day. It has a rhythm at the beginning but looses it at the end. It kind of throws the reader off. But all together, it actually works out. Because your getting the point across.
    I think its a great peice. Damn good letter to oneself. :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]


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