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Winter


Author: thezeroman88
ASL Info:    23/m/MO
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 64 /101 /28
Words: 65
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
Total Views: 1431
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:




Winter



Frost fingers forming
Scratching at the windowpanes
Cold is coming now

Still Silence, White Night
Broken by your misty breath
Cherry noses touch

Silver shining moon
Sparkling in your bright-black eyes
Seeing through my soul

Cold is coming now
Warning wind is whispering
Hold me in your hands

Fires flame inside
Know love outlasts the winter
Sleep safe my dearest.




Submitted on 2006-12-15 11:31:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the way you put it. I saw it an odd way my first read over, but I like the way I saw it. I saw it like summer is your dearest per say. And no matter how long winter is that summer will be there for you. I loved it, nothing needs changing for my vote.
| Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]
  this did put a differant spin on the usual winter-time feelings..

Yet the more you read, and think about it.. it does an excellant job at describing the winters I remember in New England..

Cold, bitter, Bone chilling.. months.

It was a great read.
| Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice. Mysterious but not quite, it's written very enchantingly. Actually sort of makes me like winter. The words are, I think, a unique style. Pretty sure it's perfect the way it is, too. Bravo!
| Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by SouthernState | [ Reply to This ]


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