[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: bryan --- part 2dots

    Author: annie smith
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 75/61/24
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 549

       this is for bryan :)
    and for ==Bass== *be happy i added a tital and an other part to the poem*

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsbryan --- part 2dots

    I am spinning out of control
    You are my life and soul
    My feelings for you are way out of line
    But still my heart skips to know your mine
    A kind, sweet voice
    You are my first and only choise
    Please wait for me

    Forever we'll be
    I love you like I love no other
    I couldn't feel like this about an other
    There's a sparkle in my eyes and a song in >>>my heart
    Just to know your life, i'm apart
    A wonderful find
    You are mine

    Submitted on 2006-12-15 15:23:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      I couldn't see part one, shamefully, but part two sounds pretty good, you show a lot of compassion for this person and it's brilliant that 2 people can share this.
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      :) yay part two was good too! how many times are we happy with a first part of something and then extremely disappointed with the next part? good thing this wasn't like that though. Very well put....you let my mind wonder, there's so much to say about love and everyone ends up saying it a little differently but it's funny how anyone who's felt the slightest bit like that can automatically relate their own feelings to it. i adored how you put:
    "My feelings for you are way out of line
    But still my heart skips to know your mine"
    ~I really, really know what you're feeling there....it almost seems wrong to feel that strong about someone, to be so intensely into them. when it feels like all you can do is want to be with them and in their thoughts. it almost seems selfish (or at least to me some days when i think about my 'him' ) like just thinking of that person's smile makes you ecstatic and wanting to be around them...kinda like getting used to your heart doing little flips when you hear their voice, it'd be selfish if they didn't feel the same i guess. haha i'm rambling, i'm so, very sorry--> it really wasn't an intention of mine, just kinda got sidetracked. great write, i'm definatly adding it to my favorites and i look forward to reading more of your writes, please dont' stop, lol you're good at it;).
    | Posted on 2006-12-26 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Like whoa this is an good love poem I like the way it was said over all great write, ty
    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    True Death written by layDsayD
    prison written by ShyOne
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    untitled written by ShyOne
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Fasade written by jackz
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Summer written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Every..... written by jackz
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Push written by JanePlane




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]