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    dots Submission Name: bryan --- part 2dots

    Author: annie smith
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 75/61/24
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 847
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       this is for bryan :)
    and for ==Bass== *be happy i added a tital and an other part to the poem*

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    dotsbryan --- part 2dots

    I am spinning out of control
    You are my life and soul
    My feelings for you are way out of line
    But still my heart skips to know your mine
    A kind, sweet voice
    You are my first and only choise
    Please wait for me

    Forever we'll be
    I love you like I love no other
    I couldn't feel like this about an other
    There's a sparkle in my eyes and a song in >>>my heart
    Just to know your life, i'm apart
    A wonderful find
    You are mine

    Submitted on 2006-12-15 15:23:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I couldn't see part one, shamefully, but part two sounds pretty good, you show a lot of compassion for this person and it's brilliant that 2 people can share this.
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      :) yay part two was good too! how many times are we happy with a first part of something and then extremely disappointed with the next part? good thing this wasn't like that though. Very well put....you let my mind wonder, there's so much to say about love and everyone ends up saying it a little differently but it's funny how anyone who's felt the slightest bit like that can automatically relate their own feelings to it. i adored how you put:
    "My feelings for you are way out of line
    But still my heart skips to know your mine"
    ~I really, really know what you're feeling there....it almost seems wrong to feel that strong about someone, to be so intensely into them. when it feels like all you can do is want to be with them and in their thoughts. it almost seems selfish (or at least to me some days when i think about my 'him' ) like just thinking of that person's smile makes you ecstatic and wanting to be around them...kinda like getting used to your heart doing little flips when you hear their voice, it'd be selfish if they didn't feel the same i guess. haha i'm rambling, i'm so, very sorry--> it really wasn't an intention of mine, just kinda got sidetracked. great write, i'm definatly adding it to my favorites and i look forward to reading more of your writes, please dont' stop, lol you're good at it;).
    | Posted on 2006-12-26 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Like whoa this is an good love poem I like the way it was said over all great write, ty
    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]

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