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SOuthern COmfort "soco"


Author: dark figure
ASL Info:    17/m/uk
Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66 /74 /29
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this was inspired by a song called stomp by young buck a drink called soco and my life where i live which happens to be south london :P hope you enjoy.

only rap ive seen on elite skills :P so i present to you a bit of my life :P



SOuthern COmfort "soco"



Were I’m from people
Get shot
And it happens to be.. That I see this a lot


An I see kids crying in the street.. While their daddies are getting locked
Stopped
5 times a day.. Nah that’s not a lot

In south were live.. In this mad place
You don’t even wanna look.. In another niggers face

Cos you might get yo'll ass killed
Get shot up and filled

Might get robbed for your new phone
Might not even.. Reach home

I see kids smoking weed like its legal
Some breh just purchased a new degal.. Already got two desert eagles

cos I’m from south and this is life
Just like the way every one is carrying a knife
Police shook cos they don’t wanna get their life taken
So they alert like sirens cos these street niggers aint shaken
(An I’m not mistaken)

South London is where beefs at
Bawlers in their top hats
pimpin bitches like their top cats
Getting stopp by the shoterz
cos they know.. Where the p's at

Turfs always changing
Drugs exchanging
Mothers crying
cos their kids are dieing

and about the knifes im not even started yet
rude boys getting head counts.. dont wanna get set
12 inch can get any size measurements but don’t know their alphabets...

cos I’m from south and this is life
Just like the way every one is carrying a knife
Police shook cos they don’t wanna get their life taken
So they alert like sirens cos these street niggers aint shaken
(An I’m not mistaken)


Don’t wanna walk the streets at night cos people so scared
Gun shots.. A noise that rings in ears
Ambulance green lights that bring tears

cos this is south London
Its where the beefs at
To many friends that have died
But we move on cos that’s that
(South London)





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  I liked it alot, and I thought that where im from was a bad place, liked the imagery in this, and how it just slams the reader with reality, the world to be a place of death and sorrow, how some people have it so hard, this was a very strong piece,

"Were I’m from people
Get shot
And it happens to be.. That I see this a lot


An I see kids crying in the street.. While their daddies are getting locked
Stopped
5 times a day.. Nah that’s not a lot"

Well it sounds alot like a rap song, idk if it is supposed to be a rap song, but think it would be a really great one, the toughness, the reality, the sense of goundshaking rampage, bambling right onto the reader, lovrf hoe it rhymed.

"In south were live.. In this mad place
You don’t even wanna look.. In another niggers face

Cos you might get yo'll ass killed
Get shot up and filled

Might get robbed for your new phone
Might not even.. Reach home"

I can relate to this piece, to a certain point, cause ive been through some pretty tough sh'it but not like fearing for your life, just by getting eyecontact. very strong wording, and nice imagery.

"I see kids smoking weed like its legal
Some breh just purchased a new degal.. Already got two desert eagles

cos I’m from south and this is life
Just like the way every one is carrying a knife
Police shook cos they don’t wanna get their life taken
So they alert like sirens cos these street niggers aint shaken
(An I’m not mistaken)

South London is where beefs at
Bawlers in their top hats
pimpin [censored]es like their top cats
Getting stopp by the shoterz
cos they know.. Where the p's at"

This makes me think of rap, and I loved the rhyme, and that there's chorus in it, make me sure it a rap song even more, and that weed thing, we have that here, I dont touch it, cause I dont want to, even though I get it offered so freakin much, it sickens me, I see kids bambling around with joints in there hands like it cool, even though its not, anyway I loved the poem/rap/prose

Very good and very realistic and strong.

Cheers!!






| Posted on 2006-12-30 00:00:00 | by -=Bass=- | [ Reply to This ]
  An excellent reflection of modern society, the cause and effect of a sinister status qou. I love the rhyme and I can't help but wonder when I read this if it is suppose toi be a slam peice or not. If not it would make a great one. Slam poetry the most powerful spoken words you can find, bleieve me. I love the constant allusion of sirens. The repeatition here is great. PEACE.
| Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]
  An excellent reflection of modern society, the cause and effect of a sinister status qou. I love the rhyme and I can't help but wonder when I read this if it is suppose toi be a slam peice or not. If not it would make a great one. Slam poetry the most powerful spoken words you can find, bleieve me. I love the constant allusion of sirens. The repeatition here is great. PEACE.
| Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]


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