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    dots Submission Name: What i feel about existencedots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1460
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       this is something different...iv never written anything like this before..tell me what u think...comment, comment comment.....


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    dotsWhat i feel about existencedots
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    who knows who i am
    only the shadows that follow me
    losing knowledge as i blink and breathe

    when will i go
    to the bottomless pit of
    underlying faiths

    what is wrong
    what is right
    instill in me the truth of life

    im spinning in the bottle of confusion
    im dizzy but still i see straight
    dont u tell me i cant live with or without power
    only the weakest shall die




    Submitted on 2004-06-01 14:37:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      lol..did you mean breathe in or out...????sorry....
    this is a great piece...captures the confusion well....
    i like the thought "instill in me the truth of life" being asked of an unknown...who to ask?
    "only the weakest shall die"
    and yet the meek inherit the earth? (i don't subscribe to this belief, yet your line seems to be at odds with it, attacking) almost a call to action....excellent write...

    james
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by FallenGrace | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good write, you've put your views down very well and although I don't have answers for the questions that are raised, I will search for them with you. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      i really enjoyed reading the poem. to me the question that should be asked every now and then has been asked again and i indeed loved the presentation.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by shahan | [ Reply to This ]
      "Only the weakest shall die." I love that. I love the independence in your words, like a proclamation, screaming 'I shall live! I shall survive!"
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Chihuahuii | [ Reply to This ]


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