My Blanket -------------------------------------------
For what it's worth
I loved you
But a love so true
Would not have broken so easily
And all the things
I should have said
But i wish i had
Then maybe things
Would have turned out differently
And all those thoughts
I wish now
Could have been more than thoughts
And all the dreams
The plans i made
Could have been memories instead
But dwelling on regrets
Is like a blanket on the beach
Cuz you just get sand on your skin anyway
that's really good bravo! i always felt that love that was really true, was something that would never end, as you said it broke so easily... i've had to many expirences in which i thought it was love, but it was a money hungry girl who thought she was playing how to lose a guy in 10 days... i think that taking charge in a relation ship is imoportant, meaning you should not just let it all pass you by, and you should share every moment... but sometimes people can just be way to shy...
this is a nice little piece about ones longing for love. it seems to me that one of them somehow got away. nevertheless, i really like this write and i look forward to reading more of your work in the future. btw, there were some neat imagery here also. continue to develop your gift.
some of this is really clever. i really like the last stanza and i love most writings that mention ocean, beaches, etc etc. and it made a lot of sense to me more than the rest of the poem. there's something about it that's really unique and i don't know what it is. keep writing.