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    dots Submission Name: My Blanketdots

    Author: moonlitsky
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 70/44/15
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 981
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       oh the cruelty of it all...

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    dotsMy Blanketdots

    For what it's worth
    I loved you
    But a love so true
    Would not have broken so easily

    And all the things
    I should have said
    I didn't
    But i wish i had
    Then maybe things
    Would have turned out differently
    And all those thoughts
    I wish now
    Could have been more than thoughts
    And all the dreams
    The plans i made
    Could have been memories instead

    But dwelling on regrets
    And should-have-beens
    Is like a blanket on the beach
    Cuz you just get sand on your skin anyway

    Submitted on 2006-12-16 02:12:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that's really good bravo! i always felt that love that was really true, was something that would never end, as you said it broke so easily... i've had to many expirences in which i thought it was love, but it was a money hungry girl who thought she was playing how to lose a guy in 10 days... i think that taking charge in a relation ship is imoportant, meaning you should not just let it all pass you by, and you should share every moment... but sometimes people can just be way to shy...
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by Blood†Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a growing talent that is very incisive, Kat! I enjoy your writing. Your prose is clear and concise, and tells a beautiful story!
    | Posted on 2006-12-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a nice little piece about ones longing for love. it seems to me that one of them somehow got away. nevertheless, i really like this write and i look forward to reading more of your work in the future. btw, there were some neat imagery here also. continue to develop your gift.

    God bless you.
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      there was indeed alot of clever wording, the last stanza like previously mentioned also being the glimmer in my eye.. for that reason.

    the poem as a whole was a worthwhile read from the very beginning. the entire piece demonstrated your emotions, the loss you were feeling.. the obvious regrets.
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]
      some of this is really clever.
    i really like the last stanza and i love most writings that mention ocean, beaches, etc etc.
    and it made a lot of sense to me more than the rest of the poem.
    there's something about it that's really unique and i don't know what it is.
    keep writing.

    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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