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Submission Name: It's too bad that your gone, and not here wit dots

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Author:	psyko
Elite Ratio:	3.5 - 376/168/66
Words:	122

Class/Type:	Rant/Venting
Total Views:	657
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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sorry bitch... I guess the heart wants what the heart wants in your case huh? sorry i'm not good enough for you.

It's too bad that your gone, and not here wit dots

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One man holds out for the woman of his dreams, while she plays the feild constantly in her fantasies... he gets flustered and saddened by games she plays, so today he'll just let her have her way, as he walks away from everything, never to turn back to the pain she brings. It makes no sense at all, one woman can never have it all, so she takes as many as she can find, and covers it up by fucking with my mind, no more. I can take this no more, earning her love has become a daily chore, a total bore, for him he's lost his will to love, he's had enough, turning his face above and crying out, WHY ME!

Submitted on 2006-12-16 02:34:56 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like it. luv the word choise and format, but my editor would mostlikely say fix some of the little grammer thing. Nothing big though and i think its great. koodoes for your write dude.
| Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by Adden Lee | [ Reply to This ]

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