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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Eternity, your absence is
    A tormenting gray season.
    A page, so white, with a marquise...
    I write - dreaming of Zion...

    Of days that would not fade
    to pain; as every second is -
    Without you, I am just a shade
    Eternity - on bended knees.

    Eternity, your touch could be,
    The taste of heavens poison.
    A flame, why can't you feel and see,
    Of hell only a fraction...

    Like I did, do, and will forever
    In chains of tears, a fallen one -
    Surounded by the dark, in fever...
    Eternity, I am outdone.




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      super!!! spiffy, nifty, lovely, amazing, an exercise in perfection, a misty angelic dream, etc and so on and so forth.....

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this. Probibly not as you do but still the same. I loved it. Eternity is nothing more than that. A moving of time. It dosent matter if we hare in euphoria or in our darkest torment, it will still press on. You can see that alot in your poem. Awsome Job ~ The Forsaken One
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by The_Forsaken1 | [ Reply to This ]


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