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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1367
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 670



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    Set in stone, the age is new.
    Starlight whispers down to you
    (drunk on blood from Satan's bath),
    "Sit and wait for Heaven's wrath."

    They're just bodies.

    Clouds swell on the movie screen.
    Tear ducts fill with kerosene
    while you realize life's a show.
    "Play your scripted role, then go."

    Sick production.

    Multiply that manic state
    sketched in dirt, but carved too late.
    Promises of shallow graves
    decompose with those enslaved.




    Submitted on 2006-12-16 13:11:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      mm this one fascinated me.... the weird lines that didn't really make sense like "tear ducts fill with kerosene" make me go all amazing on the inside!!! i love it....
    the italicized lines between the stanzas make me think of whispered voices and it scares me and i go *giggle* on the inside. but seriously, it scared me
    the last two lines are definetly my favorite
    a creepy, twisted piece of art. i love it!
    <3
    LoneWolf
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved that little peace! Your great when it come to Vampire state of mind!!!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      What is wrong with you and how do i get to be just as crazy too? Lol dont mind. I enjoyed this. I find you utterly fascinating.

    Relishing in your darkness.
    jay.
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      "Relishing in your darkness...."

    "What is wrong with you ..."

    Can you be honest with me, do you thrive off of that feeling of being that dark and vampire like person who stays at home alone, hiding from the sunlight? Is that what makes you tick? Just wondering.

    I didn't really like this one, its too synical.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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