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    dots Submission Name: Run awaydots
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    Author: H.a.n.n.a.h
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 5/10/8
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 650
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 731



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    dotsRun awaydots
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    You told me I was beautiful
    As we lay underneath the blanket of stars.
    Our young hearts were beating so fast,
    Due to the excitement of forgetting the past.

    There has never been a moment where I felt so loved
    No one could wake me up now
    Because I am no longer dreaming.
    My days of being alone are are over.
    I have no reason to pout,
    This boy makes me shine a constant smile.

    So, hunny, let us run away from here.
    Get away from all our distractions,
    And focus on us.
    As our hearts beat faster they created the rhythm,
    The rhythm to our feet as they hit the ground.
    When we run away from here.





    Submitted on 2006-12-16 16:25:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ahhh it is a nice piece, you can feel the love radiating off! : P. It is a very cute poem, though the flow is a little ify. You have ryhming here but not there..........you know ect.

    Well nice piece,

    - AnnMarie


    O' could you comment on my love my hate? or not whatever...........
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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