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    dots Submission Name: Bradleydots
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    Author: redeemer
    ASL Info:    19/female/venus
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 85/93/58
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 823
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    Description:
       This is about my boyfriend Bradley...whom I love so very much...I am so very happy with him even when I am unhappy...loves confuxing isn't it?;)


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    He smiles
    That contagious smile of his
    I smile
    And things always begin like this

    He rubs my arm
    The way that makes goosebumps apear
    I do the same
    What's next is what I fear

    He kisses me
    Soft at first but then more intense
    I kiss back
    This love has no need for pretense

    He hovers above me
    As we make love
    I watch as he moves
    Wondering why god sent him from above

    He holds me close
    As we slip into the night
    I feel nothing but happy
    And that all in the world is right

    He watches over me
    As I sleep
    I've never felt so safe
    I've never been in so deep

    He wakes in the morning
    Rises before I do
    I wake and wonder where he went to
    Believing that we are not through

    He walks in the room
    Flowers in hand
    My eyes tear at the sight
    With these my heart he demands

    He doesn't know
    That he's won it already
    I try not to burst into tears
    Try to hold steady

    He says he love me
    Says it so readily
    I say I know already
    And you know I love you too Bradley




    Submitted on 2006-12-16 19:35:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is cute....though i like the beginning better than the end merely because i sensed some rushing towards the end like you were trying to capture the emotion of your feelings for your boyfreind that you were writing very quickly ...or i could be wrong it just didn't come off as strong as the beginning....i'm curious about the line....what's next is what i fear....maqkes it seem like you fear making love to him?....or am i just reading it wrong....besides that it was love induced write...which theres nothing wrong with that...we all need love....purps
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      I do have to agree you built things up very well in the beginning and its probably my favorite part as well. As you start out by saying whats going on and then when you say...

    "What's next is what I fear"

    That seems to show your emotion well because of what you are writing about shows excitement and the urge to find out what happens next.

    So yea anywho I'm glad to see you guys are good. Can't wait to see you two again soon I hope. .

    Love,
    Brenna
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]


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