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    dots Submission Name: Dead Manís Handdots
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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 1187
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2051



    Description:
       This flow is nominally about Wild Bill Hickock, who died with the dead man's hand of aces over eights. This flow is really about a friendship of mine that died because i'm a prick.


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    dotsDead Manís Handdots
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    My song goes
    Oh no I did it again
    Loaded on Rage I deleted a friend
    Feeling cheated again,
    I played a Deadmanís Hand
    Gave myself a dirty mouth like only Redman can
    Now it feels like my chest is filled with lead and sand
    Mixed up with the urge to climb in bed again
    But
    Canít stop for a public pants drop
    Because that might suggest that I canít really stop
    This tiny little problem that I sometimes got
    Combined with being too dumb to match two socks
    Plus added to the fact that I match two cocks Ė
    The one hanging from my crotch
    With - where my neck stops
    Yesssss!
    My social life is Keystone Kops
    Only hopped up on crack with better scripted plots
    So -
    Iíve grown a heart that would break most rocks
    To go along with patience that outlasts most clocks Ė
    I -
    Did it again so what can I do?
    Maybe lost a couple friends but I still got a few Ė
    Timeís long since past when I needed a crew
    Still a long timeís passed and Iím still feeling blue
    Matta fact Ė Feeling dumb if you wanted the truth
    Got hands all thumbs plus two left shoes
    Puttiní friends on the run like I bring death too -
    Default response becoming: Yeah? Fuck You!
    Thereís increasing evidence
    And more precedents
    That Iím better off hidden up in my residence -
    Mad at the world since we changed presidents
    Been Punishing people for the crime ever since
    Now its got me saying mean shit that I never meant
    Feeling drunk and reckless even if Iím not bent -
    Apologetic emails left unsent -
    Armor getting so scratched that you canít see the dents -
    Aces over eights and then a bullet to the head
    Like hate to replace all the bullshit that I said
    And you canít change the past or at least thatís what I read
    And itís what we both thought as we both fel(t)l dead.






    Submitted on 2006-12-16 22:42:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As I was reading it, it turned into a rap in my head. And i must say... I'm not a rap fan but your [censored] is tight.

    Did it again so what can I do?
    Maybe lost a couple friends but I still got a few &#8211;

    I liked that line alot. Im adding this to my favorites.

    Jan : )
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      Sir I'm going to have to ask you to remove this art from the website.

    It is way too hot.

    :-D
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      It is so depressing.I think you wrote it in a fit of delirium.Relax friend.
    You can break my friendship [i am a stranger though] whenever you like but do it only when you are cool.
    :-Parul.
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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