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Is She The One?

Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Is She The One?

Is my heart pointing in the right direction?
Seems to me that it is directing me towards
Someplace from where I cannot withdraw my attention!
Have I been so foolish all this time?
Even though she was in front of me, I
Thank fate that now I can finally see
Her in full-bloom beauty.
Entered into my obsessions' list she has
Once in, very hard to leave behind, but
Now I leave it all in fate's hands and hers
Equally, to decide what I deserve.

Submitted on 2006-12-17 12:39:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  no dude- if it were me i wud neva let fate or HER decide wha' i deserve just because of the fact that the gal wud be a total stranger & thus i wud have to let her know who i am!
however ur poetry is the best piece that reminded me what an imaginary and "hopeful" bubble I lived in!
| Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  awww...artfully powerfully amzingly gorgeous beyond the rendering of human speech, with the angelic halo of a new romance captured in a bubble of timeless space, a place where no hurt can burst the perfectness, burst your bubble....until it does...

all the best if this is true, and all is too powerful for someone to make a decision all on there lonseome, that why we hae the fates...

| Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very powerful and beautiful poem. It's short and that is why it is so effective to the reader.
| Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]

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