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    dots Submission Name: Starry Eyesdots
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    Author: BleedingTears
    ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418/289/62
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 731
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 671



    Description:
       i was half asleep.
    it was late.
    speak what you feel.


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    dotsStarry Eyesdots
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    Time is passing by and nothing's changing.
    The sun is rising and falling,
    and all I see is dark.
    The stars forever sparkle in your eyes,
    and when you sleep no one is wishing.
    The year is close to an end yet
    I only feel the beginning of my learning.
    Some things will never let me know.
    So, I must let them go.
    Although the lights from the town wish to be the stars,
    they know they belong in your eyes.
    So, Starry Eyes, don't close for your sleep.
    Let us look into them for wishes and more wishes again.
    Please, Starry Eyes,
    Don't fall asleep tonight.




    Submitted on 2006-12-17 13:03:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow

    "The stars forever sparkle in your eyes,
    and when you sleep no one is wishing."

    those lines are truely amazing. beautiful work.

    J. Ackson Jr.
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
      "Although the lights from the town wish to be the stars,
    they know they belong in your eyes.
    So, Starry Eyes, don't close for your sleep.
    Let us look into them for wishes and more wishes again.
    Please, Starry Eyes,
    Don't fall asleep tonight."

    WOW. i love it. i love your style.
    keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by mute eternal | [ Reply to This ]
      how very...endearing....i liked reading this a lot...it reminded me of reality floating into a dream, or fading from a dream into waking or something just as un-lucid and nonsensical as all that....

    ok, im rambling....

    but the point is that i fell in love with this poem....keep writing

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      this made me go "aww" too. i did like the imagery and the way you described well everything. for me this captures a world of bliss and yet longing. nice piece.

    kat
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
      i found this very sweet, made me wanna go 'awww'.
    really nice work, i like ~
    'So, Starry Eyes, don't close for your sleep.
    Let us look into them for wishes and more wishes again'
    real nice,
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this poem was just full of imagery. Truely beautiful. Very powerful and full of descriptive language that gives the reader a beautiful image. Almost told like a story.
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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