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    dots Submission Name: self striking matchdots
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    Author: psyko
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 376/168/66
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsself striking matchdots
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    the match has been struck a long time ago...
    it's burning bright, burning very slow...
    What will be left but ashes when it's gone?
    How can this soul ever move on...

    energy invested, yet the fire is almost out...
    love costs life and time, yet, you can't be without...
    The match is growing dim, this love near trashed...
    We've been weakened by forces we didn't know we had...

    This flame is almost extinguished, We both know it well...
    But without each other, we'll both go through hell...




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      umm.. i cant really find a problem with your stuff other than the fact that of the 4 ive read none of them were very original.. im kind of let down..theres no real personality. which to me makes the whole damn piece.. [censored] flow, rhyme, and whatever. if its not worth reading its not worth reading no matter how well put together it is..
    | Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      sooooo incredibly derivative. makes me want to blow chunks! no wonder this chick screwed someone else....she probably wanted someone with a pair of balls. [censored], you neutered hallmark wannabe hack!


    lmao at you!
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Awh, so very cute.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by -amberina | [ Reply to This ]


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