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    dots Submission Name: Dumpeddots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDumpeddots
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    Broken glass
    sharp shards
    splinters
    icy winters
    cold hands
    grip tight
    on my shattered
    soul
    How can I explain
    lost pain
    sent chills
    down my spine
    recognized as sorrow
    through weak eyes.
    Raise my arms to the sky
    stare at the sun
    till I'm blind
    finally I can see
    your not the one
    for me.




    Submitted on 2006-12-17 15:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked the pace in this poem. also liked the imagery of shattered glass and what not. the part that i liked most in this was:
    Raise my arms to the sky
    stair at the sun
    till I'm blind
    stair should be "stare"
    but aside from that this was a decent piece
    cheers!

    kat
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]


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