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    dots Submission Name: under the skindots
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    Author: DaRaven
    ASL Info:    25 Male Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 28/58/42
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 705
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 531



    Description:
       i dunno what i was thinking, just let my finger go on their own


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    dotsunder the skindots
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    Some so sadistically poetic
    Softened soul slightly pulled

    Perfectly pursued pressing slightly
    Powerfully pleased posing sexually

    Virtually vigorous violently crying
    Vitriol Ventures vividly collapsing

    Cannot control continuous vain?
    Cannot control cutting veins?

    Totally trapped and tortured true
    Tormented thoughts and thrashing through.

    Loving, mourning, happily sad
    Hating, awakening, Unhappily glad.




    Submitted on 2006-12-17 15:10:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      pumping
    pissing
    panting
    oh my god
    up
    down
    all around
    fu$@#ing
    fighting
    fisting
    oh what to do!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by temporal nights | [ Reply to This ]
      for just writing your diction seems well chosen. you have accidentally given a desription of the contradictive turn a person's mind might go through. It's was an honest and intriguing write. Perhaps you should try to remember what you were thinking, it mihght've been bigger than what ya think it was now?
    | Posted on 2006-12-17 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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