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Hide and Seek


Author: Memphis
ASL Info:    21/f/Right Here
Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 130 /158 /31
Words: 22
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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First poem I've written in months. It was a long dry spell.


Hide and Seek



These words
right here
have no
meaning.

I dare you
to find
one.

It’s pointless.
You’re wasting
your time.




Submitted on 2006-12-17 21:21:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  These words have meaning I find one
its wasting time
| Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
  These words
right here
have no
meaning.

I dare you
to find
one.

It’s pointless.
You’re wasting
your time.



'When I use a word,' Humpty Dumpty said, in a rather scornful tone,' it means just what I choose it to mean, neither more nor less.'

~Through the Looking Glass~


Very intriguing use of minimalism and scorn for the critic to establish control of the end product and challenge the reader to do precisely what you claim is impossible. You've definitely proven it's possible to write a post as intellectually boggling as a Rubik's Cube and smile at the bumbling efforts of those who hope to solve it. Such gentle cruelty!

Nicely done
Take care
Bill






| Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  Very postmodern... The identification of the form with the content and with the self. Of course, the words DO have a meaning (at least a literal one, the one the person in the street would understand). The statement they make is self contradictory at the literal level, leading the reader to move to a higher plane. Where maybe it's the speaker of the poem who has no meaning to express (writer's block?). Meaning hidden, needing to be sought one level up. Nice title too.
Well, it seems that this has been an excellent strategy to overcome the writer's block you mention in the presentation.
Best,
PH
| Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by Lerlim | [ Reply to This ]


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