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Author: HaldirLives
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Just an exercise. I thought about trying to write an 'emo' poem, and then decided it'd be cool to use words that started with 'emo'. How did I do?


I'm feeling emotional,
Honest and true.
I need emollition
For my sins.

I've found emoticons
Can't express me.
I've seen emotive
Words on a page.

Now I'll try emotion,
Without smilies or stars.
But no emolument
Is forthcoming.

Submitted on 2006-12-18 12:38:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hahahahaha. i read it because of the title and this was really creative! but when I read it, it didn't feel right for some just feels like some of your sentences just cut off (ha, not a pun, I promise).

"I've seen emotive
Words on a page."

It's that all? its like you're just trying to find "emo-" words to fill into the poem.

Good effort though.
| Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't think "emollition" fits in the conteext you are using it. Absolutuion does and is the obvious choice but doesn't being with "emo"

"emolument" is a cool word and works well. Overall I thought this was cute and especially liked the part about the emoticons and the close.

I'm sure you can get it firing on all cylinders.

| Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  well good try, the whole thing is sort of a try, with the poetry and the subject of it. i dont really see where sins fit into this, the rest of it seems to have you seated in front of the glowing screen. this could be a really good thing though if you keep working on it and find more words! good luck
| Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]

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