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    dots Submission Name: EMOdots
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    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Just an exercise. I thought about trying to write an 'emo' poem, and then decided it'd be cool to use words that started with 'emo'. How did I do?


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    dotsEMOdots
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    I'm feeling emotional,
    Honest and true.
    I need emollition
    For my sins.

    I've found emoticons
    Can't express me.
    I've seen emotive
    Words on a page.

    Now I'll try emotion,
    Without smilies or stars.
    But no emolument
    Is forthcoming.




    Submitted on 2006-12-18 12:38:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hahahahaha. i read it because of the title and this was really creative! but when I read it, it didn't feel right for some reason...it just feels like some of your sentences just cut off (ha, not a pun, I promise).

    "I've seen emotive
    Words on a page."

    It's like...ok...is that all? its like you're just trying to find "emo-" words to fill into the poem.

    Good effort though.
    | Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think "emollition" fits in the conteext you are using it. Absolutuion does and is the obvious choice but doesn't being with "emo"

    "emolument" is a cool word and works well. Overall I thought this was cute and especially liked the part about the emoticons and the close.

    I'm sure you can get it firing on all cylinders.

    DB
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      well good try, the whole thing is sort of a try, with the poetry and the subject of it. i dont really see where sins fit into this, the rest of it seems to have you seated in front of the glowing screen. this could be a really good thing though if you keep working on it and find more words! good luck
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]


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