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    dots Submission Name: as yet untitled, ch8 part 2dots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    18/F/The Emerald City
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 687/384/203
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Story/Lostfriend
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    dotsas yet untitled, ch8 part 2dots
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    "I have been hurt too many times and I am tired of it. I feel bad about the accident, and I will never forget that it was my fault, never forgive myself for that night. But thats all I can give you anymore. I am done being hurt, done not living becasue I am too busy helping you live"
    "My relationship with Adrian is the on part of me that I have left that you havent taken over. I love you, Tyler, but I need this, and I need to live through it on my own. I will still be there for you every single day. I will not close you out, but I need this one tiny part of me to not be a part of us."
    I watched my words sink in to him,watched the pain seep into his skin and tense his muscles. I sat there and watched the greif , the anger and the rage come over his face and I couldnt -- wouldnt -- take it back.
    Tyler pulled his hands from mine andstood in front of me, his deep chocolate eyes welling with tears.
    "I guess you can give up that easily." he whispered, his voice husky with unshed tears. I tried to reach up and touch his cheek, to hug him, but he brushed me off and left me sitting in that heavy silence.
    I covered my face with my hands and began to cry, not a sound escaping to ease that soilitary silence. I sat there alone and cried until my head would explode and no more tears would come. When i couldnt cry anymore I got up, wiped my face, and tried to forget the look on his face as he walked out the door.

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      you have an extraordinary talent for story telling. i am totally hooked on this.
    can't wait for 9. keep 'em coming, kitten!!
    still...poor ty!
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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