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    dots Submission Name: Snowfalldots
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    Author: the_truth
    ASL Info:    15/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 25/21/21
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 124
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 710



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    dotsSnowfalldots
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    Snowfall

    Plunging in an icy fleet
    From the gray sky's sanctuary
    The snowflakes ride the gusts they meet,
    Weightless for the wind to carry.

    Spiraling through endless space
    Alive in the infinite sky,
    Then blanketing the earth's bare face
    To meet oblivion... here they die...

    Just to feel the earth's brief breath,
    Each mortal drop of ice
    Goes plunging downward to its death --
    Vision is worth this sacrifice.

    Hurtling earthward from the sky
    With life to gain and life to give --
    You may say we live to die
    But I myself would die to live.




    Submitted on 2006-12-18 15:45:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello, Meagan,

    Cool.....and quite an unusual write! I would not think of snow flakes so seriously, though; rather, I would think of snowfall in a more positive way....instead of saying that snowflakes 'die', I'd say they celebrate life, decorating the whole place with their beautiful, glowing whiteness. Quite creative to think that way....good imagination........and powerful expression, too. You have got the rhyme sheme well, making it more interesting and enjoyable.
    Good write. : )
    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery in this piece, the rhyme and structure. this is fantastic! excellent! great f'in job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, man, this IS EXCELLENT! A splendid and marvelously executed poem! You must have been writing poetry for years, like 20 years ... perfect meter, with superbly chosen rhyme not even the hint of a remotely forced rhyme ... I cannot say enough nice things about this excellent, excellent poem ... BRAVO ... BRAVO ... BRAVO!!!! ... Michael
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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