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    dots Submission Name: Truly Cares pt.IIdots

    Author: Crescent
    ASL Info:    15/female/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 49/54/31
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTruly Cares pt.IIdots

    The angel of darkness
    Has lightened her wings
    Now that she is happy again
    Her black eyes turn to a sapphire blue
    Rich in color and emotion
    The black rags she once wore
    Have been replaced
    By a delicate black satin gown
    Trimmed in silver stars
    Flowing and swaying gracefully
    In the evening breeze.
    The dirt on her face
    Has been washed away
    And glitter has been applied
    Making her sparkle
    Like someone from a dream
    Instead of the nightmare
    She had just came from.
    Determined she worked
    To get out of that hell
    Far too long she paced
    Waiting and watching forever
    But now it is all over
    And there she stands
    Beautiful and lovely
    In the night
    Now that she has
    The one that
    Truly Cares.

    Submitted on 2006-12-18 20:32:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you really captured who she use to be and what she has become. i can clearly the beautiful black gown with silver and the glitter on her face and her sapphire blue eyes. it is such a beautiful vision. very well done! and i love how she became so beautiful because she found the one that truly cares. your poem is touching because it reaches an emotion of hope and happiness without having to write about that emotion directly. im waiting to be this beautiful angel of darkness that has had light shown upon her. it seems like now, instead of being forced to be in the dark, she chooses to be in light. very good. my new fav!

    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]

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