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    dots Submission Name: Disasterous Deadly Dramatic Daysdots
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    Author: MowsysWrath
    ASL Info:    15 Beastiality Bunghole
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 75/83/44
    Words: 459
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
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    dotsDisasterous Deadly Dramatic Daysdots
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    No snow falls on the cold, dry town of DuQuoin as its inhabitants carry on with their lives. The sun is blocked out by shallow clouds, bringing nothing but sorrow. The inhabitants hope for snow they'll never get.

    In the high school of this small town, drama pushes down on the lives of teens. One of which who tried to help, who tried to do something (anything) to try and relieve the pressure and stress that the others are sure to break down under. A small group of friends being his target as sadness, depression, overwhelms them and the uncut wrists of his friends were split open by a razor. He's struggling, oh look at how he struggles and cries for help. The pressure is getting to him.

    He can't concentrate, people he love and people he care about are trying to finish themselves off. They don't care of the consequences. But what's this? Another one bites the dust (or breaks the skin, I might say.) Now it's hitting him hard. He can't take it, He tried so hard to help but he's failing. Some might say he was only making it worse. Oh, look, another one bleeds and Oh no. Someone's moving away. Look at him crying like a pathetic fool. The rest of his friends are giving up! No one will help him deal with this, but why does he persist? He refuses to give in. He repents from the fate of the rest of them, he swears to fight it.

    Is he going for the razor? No, no, he can resist longer. Stubborn? No. He keeps himself held strong by will. Look now as the girl turns him down. He shrugs and walks away, not phased on the outside but on the inside he's screaming and scolding himself, going over everything he did wrong. Is it too much? Will he finally give in?

    "No..." he says silently to himself at the lunch table. "..I won't give up." But it's only a matter of time before he trips, stumbles, and falls. "No..."
    Yes says his conscience. "No." He's saying it louder, blocking out the laughter. Even the voice in his head has turned against him.

    "No!" His friends look to him, wondering why he's yelling. "NO!" He's screaming, everyone is watching him go crazy before their eyes. Defying his own mind, refusing to listen. "I WON'T!" He tries to run from them, they catch him and hold him down. The devil in his head screams in triumphant laughter.

    Now he's wrapped up in the loony bin, crying and laughing day and night as he fights himself over and over. Why did this happen? Nobody will ever know.




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      Stories that deal with the mind are some of my favorites, well i g2g i told myself that I would take my other self to arbys for dinner, but I might cancel if the other me dosn't shut up/

    I apologise for my previous post my nice voice is so irritating.


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    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Samantha45 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes, when you're trying to do what's "right," it just kicks you square in the face. You have to realize, the world is full of people who you can't control... just yourself. I liked very much your wording "drama pushes down" on the lives... it doesn't just push down on teens only, sadly enough... it just becomes a broken kind of solitary loneliness that doesn't feel "shared".... the closing off? I don't know.

    So how to keep the pressure, the conformity of dysfunction at bay... that becomes the crux. It is sometimes easier to feel things from a distance, when you can't get out of the small town, high school setting, I think... Not to the point of total alienation, because that has bad results, but maybe just self-preservation... I guess it just means that sometimes when you're holding someone who's going over the cliff, and they are that determined to go, you learn from their fall. Cruel and cold, but that is just how it has to be unless you want to go over the edge trying to pull them back when they don't want to come back up. At some point, they have to save themselves.

    Hang tough, kiddo, 14 doesn't last forever.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]



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