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From What I've seen

Author: darkwiccan14
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I'm sick of guys well i guess it's their nature, lol JK! not meaning to pick on anyone! lol

From What I've seen

From what I've seen,
Is the monster you've become,
The monster that's taken your gleam.

This deep awful feeling I have feels like crum,
This deep awful felling I have feels like I don't deserve to see your beautiful beam,
When you smile at me,
And that's when,
I know that this won't last long and we'll never be.

From what I've seen,
Is the monster you've become,
Taking over you slowly,
Devouring you some,
And then now when you talk to me,
you talk to me so coldly.

This deep awful feeling I have,
This very deep awful feeling I have,
I must give and must take what I can grab,
Since this awful feeling won't go away,
And I must leave you here,
All alone and astray.

Submitted on 2006-12-18 21:17:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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