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    dots Submission Name: Dem EyeZdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 616
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 524



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    dotsDem EyeZdots
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    Look at dem eyez
    You look at her
    and think that she couldn't tell a lie
    but deep inside she a freak wit experince
    she look at you wit those beatiful blue eyez
    You swear ur hypothies
    You swear u do anything just to get between them thighs

    Never seen a girl so fly
    Not going to lie
    I already got a girl
    just looking to fit your glove
    u waking up in the morning
    feeling like a whole new girl
    in a whole new better world




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      the poem is to slang for my taste. i also agree with martha, it sounds like a rap song. being from an older generation myself, i dont really like rap, or the shortened or mispronounced wording used in rap songs.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by sinjen | [ Reply to This ]
      it is okay...just sounds like a rap song that has been played over and over again...but i am a little older than you so the generation gap may be the problem for me to give you a good comment...sorry..
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Martha McEntire | [ Reply to This ]
      ha nice! lol. very sexual, and lustful. that's hot.
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]


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