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    dots Submission Name: I Want Youdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 794
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 848



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       another thing i'm working on.


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    dotsI Want Youdots
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    I want you to be happy and lovin me
    I want you to feel that my love is real
    I want you to know
    If you love me
    I'll never let u go.
    I see nothing wit a little bump n' grind
    just keep it slow

    I've been been thnking about you all dam day
    I want you to know
    It's all about you baby

    You playin hard to get
    you say I dont' know what love is
    But truley does anyone know what love is.
    here way lay under the sheets
    so close
    I can hear your heartbeat
    Being wit you make my knee's week
    Being wit you is life time oppurtuieties
    many people don't get the oppurtunitie
    to hold you like i do
    on your knees
    now let's go
    keep it on the low




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      Uhm if a guy wrote this for me...I wouldnt be [censored]in that you 'don't know what love is'! I think you do! Check your spellingon Oppertunity, and oppertunities. Every thing flows and sounds lovely...just 'makes my knees weak' sounds like you just needed something that rhymed. Il oved this!

    -Halston
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with all the others, expecially since I know how you feel!
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by loveofpoetry | [ Reply to This ]
      omg you are alive...lol..long time no see..you haven't been on in a while where the hell have you been? anyway, the lyrics, I do have to say that first off I agree with the lot of people who have all ready commented by saying that you do care for a girl a lot, which is so sweet. do you ever show her or them this stuff that you wrtie (when I say them I'm not impliying anything, I'm just saying I'm sure you've liked more then one girl at one point in time, so yeah) I'll be looking at someother stuff. yay

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Great work on this...it gets alot of feeling into this along with placing the reader into your eyes. Great work on this, keep on writting!
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really good piece it really shows how much you care for this girl, i FELT the same way bubt i just got dumped. A little to gangster for my taste though lol
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by panzyrocker | [ Reply to This ]
      god you are a little romeo. lol. so romantic and loving.... it's cute. anyway. just thought i'd check this out cause i was pretty sure i'd like it, which i do.
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]


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