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    dots Submission Name: Lost Myselfdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsLost Myselfdots
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    Heíd rather go smoke some pot.
    As I watch your embers stoke to red hot.
    You tiptoe through your relationship uncomfortably.
    I donít regret the intrusion by me.
    I lost my morals somewhere.
    Itís probably with my fingers in your hair.
    I lost the feeling of being alone.
    I think itís in your protruding backbone.
    I forgot how to remain calm.
    When we grasped palm to palm.
    I even lost my heart.
    In the very weaving of this art.
    Your fire is heated up passed mild.
    And Iíve been lost in you since you first smiled




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