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    dots Submission Name: escaping realitydots

    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 521
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       1) i took and accomplished emoticon bob's challenge
    2) i wanted to write about my past experience on drugs
    3) i wrote this when i was on drugs
    4) i couldve put more....but i didn't
    5) stop reading my "description and read the damn "poem" already!!!

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    dotsescaping realitydots

    the green herbs when you were young,
    but now the pills
    you start trippin out
    begin to feel the chill
    as it slides down your back
    picking up the hairs on your neck
    are you still alive?
    how can you check?

    don't be scared
    this is only temparary
    but when it's gone you go for another round
    so it will never go away....
    ....so can forget
    ....forget about your past
    but somehow you see it
    as it went by so fast
    all your failures
    with very little accomplishments
    telling yourself "thats life"
    and you take what you get

    it's wearing off
    so you take some more
    maybe a bit too much
    cuz now your on the floor
    you hear them talk and laugh
    but you dont care
    they will never understand the pain
    so you get up to give a cold snare

    you see their true colors
    as they try to hide it
    they deny everything
    and call it all bullshit
    but you know the real them
    cuz you had thier back to the end
    but look at them now
    everything you say will offend
    have they no dignity?
    have they no pride?
    it's wearing off again
    so you run and hide
    taking twice as much
    hoping it'll last longer
    but your stomach.....
    it has hunger

    they talk so fuckin slow
    and the room isn't the same
    you begin to question your sanity
    cuz everything looks and feels like a game
    time passes so quickly
    and you don't even notice
    your eyes have become bloodshot red
    and your mind can't focus

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    ||| Comments |||
      When I left the hell-hole I call home, I was in a dark place. These feelings, I can relate to. I love this poem.
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      This brings back memories when I was a pot head and took my first acid trip.
    Something I want to avoid.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, brought back wonderful memories. I think you desribed everything very well and the style is good. Thats really all i have to say. good job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good...and so truthful...i think that you can add more to the end of it..but that is your choice..it is good no matter what...i think that a lot of people not just teenagers feel this way..i know i have at some point of my life...i hope your life is better now...keep up the good works..martha
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Martha McEntire | [ Reply to This ]

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