Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: escaping realitydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 501
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1778



    Description:
       1) i took and accomplished emoticon bob's challenge
    2) i wanted to write about my past experience on drugs
    3) i wrote this when i was on drugs
    4) i couldve put more....but i didn't
    5) stop reading my "description and read the damn "poem" already!!!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsescaping realitydots
    -------------------------------------------


    the green herbs when you were young,
    but now the pills
    you start trippin out
    begin to feel the chill
    as it slides down your back
    picking up the hairs on your neck
    are you still alive?
    how can you check?

    don't be scared
    this is only temparary
    but when it's gone you go for another round
    so it will never go away....
    ....so can forget
    ....forget about your past
    but somehow you see it
    as it went by so fast
    all your failures
    with very little accomplishments
    telling yourself "thats life"
    and you take what you get

    it's wearing off
    so you take some more
    maybe a bit too much
    cuz now your on the floor
    you hear them talk and laugh
    but you dont care
    they will never understand the pain
    so you get up to give a cold snare

    you see their true colors
    as they try to hide it
    they deny everything
    and call it all bullshit
    but you know the real them
    cuz you had thier back to the end
    but look at them now
    everything you say will offend
    have they no dignity?
    have they no pride?
    it's wearing off again
    so you run and hide
    taking twice as much
    hoping it'll last longer
    but your stomach.....
    it has hunger

    they talk so fuckin slow
    and the room isn't the same
    you begin to question your sanity
    cuz everything looks and feels like a game
    time passes so quickly
    and you don't even notice
    your eyes have become bloodshot red
    and your mind can't focus




    Submitted on 2006-12-19 11:23:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      When I left the hell-hole I call home, I was in a dark place. These feelings, I can relate to. I love this poem.
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      This brings back memories when I was a pot head and took my first acid trip.
    Something I want to avoid.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, brought back wonderful memories. I think you desribed everything very well and the style is good. Thats really all i have to say. good job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good...and so truthful...i think that you can add more to the end of it..but that is your choice..it is good no matter what...i think that a lot of people not just teenagers feel this way..i know i have at some point of my life...i hope your life is better now...keep up the good works..martha
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Martha McEntire | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    129313

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    no sky on the other side written by teika5

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry