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    dots Submission Name: My Heart Beats For Himdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 475
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    Description:
       A poem about my boyfriend <3


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    dotsMy Heart Beats For Himdots
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    Your dark eyes
    Catch me in their gleam
    The love I have for you
    Is more than it seems

    Your kiss holds me
    Makes me feel safe
    With you
    There are no risks I can't take

    Your strong hands
    Hold me when I am alone
    Because of you
    I will never be on my own

    The sound of your voice
    Calms my stormy sea
    This trust in you
    Will always be

    You'll never truly realize
    How I care for you
    The truth is
    I am in love with you




    Submitted on 2006-12-19 15:53:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it. And that's all I can say. Really good.
    I F.L.Y



    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really nice Ren. Was it meant for me lol. Anyway i liked the flow in this very nice, the stanza's just melted together like layers on an ice cream. Strange anology i know but it gets the point across lol.

    Legally yours,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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