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    dots Submission Name: travel for the heartdots
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    Author: DaRaven
    ASL Info:    25 Male Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 28/58/42
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I have drifted down a cobble stone road and twisted my leg a bit.
    I do not look at where i had fell but where i had slipped.

    The reasons why i missed that step was because i've gone off track.
    Now i must get it straight so i can get on back.

    No more mental games with my head.
    no more emotions laying there dead.
    I will not store them if they have no use
    for i cannot take more abuse.

    From past times and past lies all this past that i deny
    No more bitterness, no more wines, now my time to really shine

    Back on top this cobble stone road, as i travel this town in mexico.
    Jelepa's the place where I've gone to learn more,
    and i learned more of myself then ever before .




    Submitted on 2006-12-19 17:16:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...the first 3 stanzas sound a little like me and how I should just keep trying.
    Beautifully written.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]


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