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Lonesome


Author: GothamFreak
Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110 /48 /19
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Description:

to be alone is to have no one there to hurt you

i hate being alone

but i hate being hurt


Lonesome


this feeling inside of me
can't find its way out
I feel empty
and alone
as these animals surround me
tearing away at one another's flesh
because acceptance is unknown to them
because the differences
that each one contains
is something to be fearful of
in each set of dagger-like eyes
because thinking clearly is overrated
these idiotic animals
limit their minds to think
that the actions of a few
reflect the actions of them all
but these animals are imbeciles
and I try to shut them out
as they surround me
I shut them out
because this empty feeling
inside of me
can't seem to let itself free
I have no choice
but to be alone




Submitted on 2006-12-19 17:39:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like it. on a personal level I can really connect. The feeling that the whole world is diffrent, not like you, strange, and you cant accept it because it seems wrong. It seems like everyone hits a fork in the road at one point where they see society as it is, most people just accept it but you took the chance to step back and enjoy the view, this piece is portraying how you dont want to be part of the society, it is crazy, and wrong, so you would rather be by yourself, right?
but then somehow it points out that you would rather not, but there is nothing else to be done. You are saving yourself but also hurting it.

its well written and easy to understand. Its cool how I can really connect with it.

Keep up the great work.
| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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