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    dots Submission Name: Lonesomedots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       to be alone is to have no one there to hurt you

    i hate being alone

    but i hate being hurt


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    dotsLonesomedots
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    this feeling inside of me
    can't find its way out
    I feel empty
    and alone
    as these animals surround me
    tearing away at one another's flesh
    because acceptance is unknown to them
    because the differences
    that each one contains
    is something to be fearful of
    in each set of dagger-like eyes
    because thinking clearly is overrated
    these idiotic animals
    limit their minds to think
    that the actions of a few
    reflect the actions of them all
    but these animals are imbeciles
    and I try to shut them out
    as they surround me
    I shut them out
    because this empty feeling
    inside of me
    can't seem to let itself free
    I have no choice
    but to be alone




    Submitted on 2006-12-19 17:39:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it. on a personal level I can really connect. The feeling that the whole world is diffrent, not like you, strange, and you cant accept it because it seems wrong. It seems like everyone hits a fork in the road at one point where they see society as it is, most people just accept it but you took the chance to step back and enjoy the view, this piece is portraying how you dont want to be part of the society, it is crazy, and wrong, so you would rather be by yourself, right?
    but then somehow it points out that you would rather not, but there is nothing else to be done. You are saving yourself but also hurting it.

    its well written and easy to understand. Its cool how I can really connect with it.

    Keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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