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    dots Submission Name: Hopedots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 640
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 888



    Description:
       It's difficult knowing that somebody you have known all your life is going and leaving you forever, but it's even harder waiting for it to happen.


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    it has been six years
    since I have seen his face
    but from time to time
    I see him in my dreams
    now
    he's leaving
    going to a better place
    that's what I hope for
    that's what I pray for
    I pray that he goes to a better place
    because he's going
    and it's the end
    he's leaving me in the dust
    I don't know when
    but I know that it will be soon
    as I begin to feel the anger
    build up in my heart
    I don't know
    where to place this anger
    because this is the last stage
    and I know that it's the end
    but I don't want to believe it
    it makes me so angry
    I can't believe it
    I have to have hope
    no matter what I believe
    no matter what I think
    I have to have hope




    Submitted on 2006-12-19 17:57:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awsome poem...

    i dont know wht to say.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very strong write and a strong testament to the Love you have for this Person
    This person will always live in your Heart I hope you realize that
    Dont ever give up hope
    I promise you years and years down the line You will still have this person on your side and in your Heart no matter what
    Beautiful write
    It is Heartwarming to hear of people like you who have a huge Heart
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      On a scale of 5, 5 being the highest, I would probably give this about a 3. You did well with the emotions, but unfortunately, what I'm seeing here is that there's nothing to carry the emotions. I would work on strengthening your writing to the point where it does justice to the emotions. But nicely done, all the same.

    Reciprocity is my policy, so please comment back on one of my works. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]


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