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    dots Submission Name: My Heart Stopped Beatingdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       A poem about the pain of heartache </3


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    dotsMy Heart Stopped Beatingdots
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    My heart stops beating
    You abandoned me
    Left me alone
    In all this misery

    You ripped out my heart
    It was beating in your hand
    There was so much love in it
    If only you would understand

    It's my fault
    That you did what you had to
    Now I am left
    Torn apart without you

    I can't look in the mirror
    knowing I am to blame
    For all this heartache
    All the fucking pain

    My heart has stopped beating
    I know it to be true
    All because
    I fell in love with you
















    Submitted on 2006-12-19 18:47:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey I like it. And like jay said it was him not you. Oh well nice write. I F.L.Y
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry you are feeling this. I am going to give you the stock best friend response its not you its him, he didnt deserve you. I know this doesnt mean it still doesnt hurt. I cant take that pain away only you can, in time. Keep your chin up precious. You have to stumble a few times before you can walk.

    A Friend In Your Corner Always,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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