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    dots Submission Name: Looking Glassdots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My dad and I love Alice in Wonderland and he wanted me to write a poem like it. The original was written backwards so you could only read it if you held it up to a mirror!


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    dotsLooking Glassdots
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    Try to riddle who I am
    You take one guess and let it pass
    But as you look, it's only me
    The girl within the looking glass
    Behind the glass, what is this place?
    With raging streams and seas of sand
    Reason can no longer be
    Now gone away from Wonderland
    Nonsense is the only rule
    The sane are mad, the shadows talk
    Wall-less windows, knobless doors
    And keys that never had a lock
    You may find you like it here
    Though nothing will be as you planned
    If you wish, step through the glass
    And then return to WOnderland




    Submitted on 2006-12-19 20:41:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Creative idea! I'm a big fan of Lewis Carrol, too. Very whimsical but thoughtful, and a joy to read indeed.
    Best wishes,
    Shadow
    | Posted on 2008-12-07 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, man, this IS a short but utterly superb poem! Excellent! bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... Michael
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      "Nonsense is the only rule" ...You may imagine how much I like this line.

    The waves of a real artist are "running" throught your enigmatic mind. A question, an answer... an invitation that I will sure follow.
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really nice, I love Alice in Wonderland as well so it was a nice read love the wording.
    good job.
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really nice piece.I also am a fan of Alice in Wonderland and the madness of her dreamworld.The poem is nicely balanced,it reads really smoothly and the rhyming is good also.One of the best poems I've read on here for quite some time.
    Cheers
    A.C
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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