This was great...im not really into reagious writng but this one i liked alot......It went very well toghether n i don't see no problems with this piece....it good to see young teenager write bout somthing that is so touchy these days....
well i hope to hear from ya n keep up the good work..
Great job. This is a great piece of writing. It's nice to see some people who will actually write religious poetry. I, really can't do it. Although I havent tried too much. That kind of writing I guess just isnt my style. But you can pull it off very well. Props to you!
How graceful and religious of you to write this very loving poem. I loved how you made it seem as if though lord is around us all the time and within us. Very thoughful. And how you brought hope that there is truth out there, because nowadays i fell there isn't any.
This is a cute little piece. I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry and I try to avoid it whenever it's possible, but it flows well in this poem. This is a very simple piece, but I think that it works well.
That being said, it's not the best thing I've ever read. It's not the worst either. I've written worse things I'm sure, and I've read awful things when cruising through ES. But this was cute and I enjoyed it. Maybe add a description and tell us what you were thinking about at the time. Then write again. The only way to get better is to keep writing. I think that you could do really well here if you got a little more experience.